"How to Save" a Draft

One strength that I have in my speech is the research I was able to include but also without just throwing it into my speech. I was able to reference the article or information briefly but this research also added to the content of my speech. It made my speech credible but also interesting and supported my own personal ideas.  Another strength I had was adding my own personal connection at the end. It helps to keep my readers interested and also shows how passionate I am for this subject. Not convinces my audience and keeps their attention.  I also think the singing at the end will really excite my audience.  Everyone seems excited to hear me sing and I know it will both add to my speech and make the ending interesting but also memorable.

One thing I need to work on that is wrong with my speech is going from written to spoken. When writing an essay, things are ordered and phrased to be read, not spoken.  When first reading my speech aloud, I noticed that certain things I wouldn't say the way they were written and had to go back and fix a lot of the phrasing.  Also, i have to work on not sounding like I am reading from the TelePrompTer.  At certain points, I tend to rush, so by slowing down and taking pauses, this will make the speech flow better, be easier to understand, and also keep it seeming like I'm not just reading. 

It is going to be both easy and a challenge getting the readers to feel my passion when I am speaking.  I am extremely passionate about music and get so excited when I get to speak about it, but sometimes I get so lost in my speech I lose the feel I am trying to convey.  I need to be more animated without feeling silly to really convince the audience that music is my life and what I love, which really shouldn't be that hard with a little practice because both of those statements are true.  I am also really good at using my body when speaking.  I feel that when using your hands in a speech or walking around a little bit back and forth, this is a more interactive form of speech and also shows your passion for the subject you are speaking about.  The only trick here is that I don't want to appear nervous or figity when doing this.  I have to practice and get into a rhythm so it feels rehearsed or natural and not out of anxiety.   

While watching the Torres in the class, i san how we'll they paced their speeches and I want to achieve that when I deliver.  It was easy to follow most of their speeches without getting bored or lost.  Also, watching My showed me the kind of interaction with her body language that I feel is affective.  I want to use some of this when I deliver my speech.